Today Johnny was going fishing for whiting on his uncles boat, he had to wake up really early to be on the water at the high-tide. As soon as Johnny woke up he put his clothes on and took out his rod and real form his shed. When his uncle picked him up they got on the water straight away, when they where driving to the spot that is 12 kilometres off Shaw they saw some birds diving down. So they dropped their lines down and waited, and zzzzzzz Johnnys real was screaming when he pulled up the fish he thought it was a whiting but it was a snapper, it was heavier than he expected.
The story was really good but I think that you could push it about further for us to see a real picture. Instead of the z’s you should of put a more interesting word!!!
Matilda